I haven’t pimped this in a while, and since I just posted there, I thought I might as well do so now. I (and a few others) have a writing community over at
oh… and yadda yadda yadda review my story yadda yadda.
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I haven’t pimped this in a while, and since I just posted there, I thought I might as well do so now. I (and a few others) have a writing community over at
oh… and yadda yadda yadda review my story yadda yadda.
yadda yadda
My two cents on the story…
After reading the first chapter, I’m curious about Jamie. Who is she? Is she confident or shy? How did she feel about K before that night?
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yeah, I’m building towards revealing more of Jamie’s feelings on what happened, but its tricky. The thing I’m struggling with is that its a first person narrative, and a huge part of the story depends on K not really knowing what’s going on in Jamie’s head. And he’s also pretty smart. So I have to carefully give hints to what she’s thinking without making him seem like an idiot for not picking up on those hints even though he is the filter for them for us.
Re: yadda yadda
yeah, I’m building towards revealing more of Jamie’s feelings on what happened, but its tricky. The thing I’m struggling with is that its a first person narrative, and a huge part of the story depends on K not really knowing what’s going on in Jamie’s head. And he’s also pretty smart. So I have to carefully give hints to what she’s thinking without making him seem like an idiot for not picking up on those hints even though he is the filter for them for us.
yadda yadda
My two cents on the story…
After reading the first chapter, I’m curious about Jamie. Who is she? Is she confident or shy? How did she feel about K before that night?